http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/ It's going to be hard to resist her boss... and his brother Sat, 23 May 2009 08:43:32 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-219 Julia Thu, 29 Nov 2007 03:36:45 +0000 http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-219 I wonder if Troy knows she's his sister (if he is really her brother). Could be he doesn't like her because he's jealous. I would be really surprised if you didn't have a few mistakes considering the number of chapters you are posting. They didn't stop me from reading. I wonder if Troy knows she’s his sister (if he is really her brother). Could be he doesn’t like her because he’s jealous. I would be really surprised if you didn’t have a few mistakes considering the number of chapters you are posting. They didn’t stop me from reading.

]]> http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-214 Ingrid Thu, 29 Nov 2007 01:41:17 +0000 http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-214 I know this isn't your final draft and it hasn't gone to your editor yet so the topos etc. are to be overlooked. I've read your finished works so I know you're good about editing. You said Paul kissed her "bitterly", WHY??? I don't understand. And the term is crack a rib. Please once again don't make Shane too stupid, she needs to be more open about what Bethany is up to and get that monster stopped soon!!! Also if the father has been watching her why hasn't someone (even undercover) put a stop to Bethany's terror? I know this isn’t your final draft and it hasn’t gone to your editor yet so the topos etc. are to be overlooked. I’ve read your finished works so I know you’re good about editing. You said Paul kissed her “bitterly”, WHY??? I don’t understand. And the term is crack a rib.
Please once again don’t make Shane too stupid, she needs to be more open about what Bethany is up to and get that monster stopped soon!!! Also if the father has been watching her why hasn’t someone (even undercover) put a stop to Bethany’s terror?

]]> http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-204 sylviahubbard1 Wed, 28 Nov 2007 18:49:27 +0000 http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-204 Rochelle was described as a mid fourties AA woman. (well at least I thought I did, but I'll check again.) Rochelle was described as a mid fourties AA woman. (well at least I thought I did, but I’ll check again.)

]]> http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-201 eva Wed, 28 Nov 2007 17:46:55 +0000 http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-201 is rochelle black or white? is rochelle black or white?

]]> http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-200 Joy Wed, 28 Nov 2007 17:05:01 +0000 http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-200 Wait...something just came to me from nowhere...lol It said that she met the son at the office...it could be assumed she met the daughter there too...but not necessarily...so could Rochelle be the daughter? Wait…something just came to me from nowhere…lol It said that she met the son at the office…it could be assumed she met the daughter there too…but not necessarily…so could Rochelle be the daughter?

]]> http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-199 sylviahubbard1 Wed, 28 Nov 2007 17:03:29 +0000 http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-199 Aran: This is off the top of my head, so don't expect perfection. But if you see something, please let me know. I'm always open for comments and questions and critique Aran: This is off the top of my head, so don’t expect perfection. But if you see something, please let me know. I’m always open for comments and questions and critique

]]> http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-198 Joy Wed, 28 Nov 2007 17:00:33 +0000 http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-198 I hope the daughter isn't Rachel too. That's too much to handle lol I hope the daughter isn’t Rachel too. That’s too much to handle lol

]]> http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-197 Aran Wed, 28 Nov 2007 16:33:53 +0000 http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-197 Son is troy and daughter is Rachel! Wow... But one observation- there are a lot of mistakes in the novel in erms of spellings, grammar etc. whcihc is very unlike you... Son is troy and daughter is Rachel! Wow… But one observation- there are a lot of mistakes in the novel in erms of spellings, grammar etc. whcihc is very unlike you…

]]> http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-195 carmel beauty Wed, 28 Nov 2007 14:16:14 +0000 http://drawingtheline.wordpress.com/2007/11/28/chapter-261/#comment-195 The son is Troy but the daughter please don't tell me it's Rachel. That does explain Troy's animosity though. The son is Troy but the daughter please don’t tell me it’s Rachel. That does explain Troy’s animosity though.

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